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 Post subject: lyrics
PostPosted: Thu Jun 10, 2010 6:58 pm 
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hey, i just want peoples opinions on theese lyrics and maby improvements? =)


i’ll do english just this 1 time,
to get out this feeling of mine,
that I feel the need to share with more,
that if you give away your heart you’ll get it back sore

no matter how strong the love is,
even if you think all can be fixed with one kiss,
there will come problems that make you want to give up
tell her to shut up, so you stand up

saying you want out, you won’t take it anymore
she start to shout. Your many doubts become many more
you takes a step back to stop the fighting
and you no longer have a doubt you did the right thing

giving away your heart is hard cuz you only got one
And when you’ve given it away the fight is on
thats Is the feeling the needed to share with more,
so if you give away your heart prepare to get it back sore


soo, what do you guys think?

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 Post subject: Re: lyrics
PostPosted: Thu Jun 10, 2010 8:34 pm 
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"you takes a step back to stop the fighting"

change takes to take and I like it :D


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 Post subject: Re: lyrics
PostPosted: Fri Jun 11, 2010 3:16 am 
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That was good! :o

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 Post subject: Re: lyrics
PostPosted: Fri Jun 11, 2010 7:13 am 
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Soirem wrote:
"you takes a step back to stop the fighting"

change takes to take and I like it :D

alreaddy changed that, but thx =)

here are updated version:


i’ll do english just this 1 time,
to get out this feeling of mine,
that I feel the need to share with more,
that if you give away your heart you’ll get it back sore

no matter how strong the love is,
even if you think all can be fixed with one kiss,
there will come problems that make you want to give up
tell her to shut up, so you stand up

saying you want out, you won’t take it anymore
she starts to shout. Your many doubts become many more
you tak a step back to stop the fighting
and you no longer have a doubt you did the right thing

giving away your heart is hard cuz you only got one
And when you’ve given it away the fight is on
That’s the feeling that I need to share with more,
That if you give away your heart prepare to get it bacK sore

=)

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 Post subject: Re: lyrics
PostPosted: Wed Jun 30, 2010 7:19 pm 
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quite good! :)

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 Post subject: Re: lyrics
PostPosted: Wed Jun 30, 2010 8:45 pm 
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thank you, anything i could do better? =)

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 Post subject: Re: lyrics
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